You have been working hard on your Introductions, and by now, you will all have clear Thesis Statements with a point and a direction... now the same question from Day 1: What happens next?Remember to focus. You have plan. You have your point; don't lose it. Think of 2-3 body ideas that clearly, concisely, and cleverly support your point. Develop them with relevant supporting details. Remember your reader. If a reader reads it, would a reader understand it? Or does it need further explanation, examples, and clarification? You need to ask yourself again and again.
It is fine if you get it, but it only matters if the reader does. Get it?
Include your ID# on this last journal blog post for the term. Aj. M
My thesis statement is to tell 4 innovations that can adapted cars, trains,mans airplanes to use less fuel. In my bodies essay, I will explain the natural gas on cars, plug-in hybrid on cars, electric trains, and Eco airplanes. Moreover, I will give some examples in each innovation to make the reader easily to understand.
ReplyDelete5580845
Well done... you sound very organized.
DeleteMy thesis statement is " how people in Bangkok solve the traffic congestion and maintain the environment while lots of vehicles are being used more and more ". I explain more about how hybrid cars (body1), Electric cars (body2), and using public transportation (Body3) helps improve the environment and also focus on lower gasoline consumption. In conclusion part, I clarify all these three topics that innovation and vehicles are mixed to reduce the environmental issues.
ReplyDelete5581007
Ok... so the conclusion looks like a kind of reflection, which will work. Do you imagine that Bangkok will improve in the future?
DeleteMy thesis statement is how communicating through Skype benefits people. In my essay I will discuss about:
ReplyDeleteBody 1 - Cost effective (free calls and conference, low rates for mobile and land-line calls)
Body 2 - Convenience (easy to install and use, can make calls from anywhere)
Body 3 - Real time communication (instant messaging, voice/video calls, group meetings)
#5580825
Ok... this works even though it isn't so interesting. Sure... it benefits people. What kind of people? Can you be more specific about this?
DeleteMy thesis statement is "The latest car technologies actually can protect the vehicle owners and road user’s life." For about the body part of my essay, I would like to explain about Lane blind spot system in body1, Pre-Safe of Mercedes Benz in body 2 and in body 3 is about braking and vehicle stability system. Furthermore, I will give some example, statistic and some background information of these technology to make the readers understand more about what I would like to tell in the essay .
ReplyDelete# 5580988
Well done. You look like you have a clear plan.
DeleteThesis statement: GPS can help a transportation business in three obvious ways; decrease the rate of stolen cars, decrease the number of accidents and increase profit.
ReplyDeleteBody 1- If someone try to steal the truck, GPS will indicate the position of the truck which is help the owner know where the stolen truck is.
Body 2 - GPS have ability to tell how fast the truck is going. The company can control the speed limit of their truck which will provide safety to the people and workers.
Body 3 - Control the speed limit is not only decreasing number of road accident, but it also give the business owner to gain more profit such as lower the cost of buying petrol.
#5580949
ReplyDeleteBody 2 and 3 make perfect sense for me. Body 1 seems like the weak idea. Body 1 would be a benefit for anyone. Can you think of a benefit that would be clearly specific to businesses.
DeleteMy thesis statement is about the innovations of airplane that aims to environmentally-friendly. The body 1 is about the innovation in airplane that reduce air pollution. The body 2 is about the technologies that result in the reduction of airplane noise. In the body 3 I will introduce the innovation of Eco-design of the airplane. Moreover, I will provide the example in points in order to understand more about the main idea
ReplyDelete#5581019
This sounds clear. Make sure you can keep focused on the point. If you can, this will be a great essay.
DeleteMy thesis statement is "there are many reasons why robots will replace human labor in the near future". In body 1, I will talk about reliability of robot and use the rate of stealing in factory as a support. Body 2 is the robots are far more effcient than human labor. In body 3, it is about the requirment of human labor such as monthly wage and robot can be the tool to solve this problem for employer.
ReplyDelete#5581001
My thesis statement is "People exploit others by using technological innovation to violate personal rights, corruption, and commit crime". In my bodies essay, I will follow the 3 ways of using technological innovation in the wrong way. I also give example point by point to make the reader understand clearly.
ReplyDelete#5581025
My thesis statement is " A business can gain several advantages from internet marketing". In the body paragraphs, I will explain how internet marketing is cheaper (lower costs of advertisement and market research), easier for market expansion, and creating better relationship with customers.
ReplyDelete#5580824
This journal blog is now closed. Thank you for your participation. Aj. M
ReplyDelete