We're almost there. Now comes the "easy" part: write the essay. You have worked hard to narrow a topic and from that, develop an introduction with a clear point, with a clear thesis statement. From here, the path forward should be clear.This doesn't mean that it is an easy path, but the direction should at least be logical and reasonable. For the purposes of this final assignment, you should be thinking of 3 ideas that follow clearly from your thesis statement. They may be aspects of your topic. They may be reasons for your opinion. They may be examples of the phenomenon you stated. Make sure that all of the ideas directly relate back to the thesis statement.
In this journal blog, share the 3 ideas that you plan to use for your Body paragraphs. If necessary, explain how they relate to your thesis statement. Remember to include your ID# and Section # in your post. Aj. M
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ReplyDeleteMy topic is the nail polish that can prevent date rape drug which is Under Cover colors. My first body is going to introduce the creators and their aim of generating this product. The second one is gonna talk about the nail polish function, and the substances used in committing sexual assault. Lastly, the third paragraph is gonna talk about the customers ' feedback.
This looks good. The third paragraph maybe the hardest one and will require some research.
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ReplyDeleteMy 3 body paragraphs that is related to my thesis which is about the advantages of nuclear power are the lower cost of electricity from nuclear power plants, the ecological energy and the efficient and powerful energy.
Ok... I hope you will be clear by what you mean when you say "ecological energy". Remember that you are promoting this kind of energy in comparison with other alternatives.
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ReplyDeleteMy thesis is about the creative methods of preserved mangoes that can handle the problem of easily rotten mangoes for Thai exporters. So, I am going to present three methods of preservations which are drying, pickling and juicing. Then, I will prove that all of these can solve the problem and even enable the exporters to gain more money.
This looks like it will work. Well done.
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ReplyDeleteFirst idea: how to make a retirement plan in term of family
Second idea: how to make a retirement plan in term of finance
Third idea: how to make a retirement plan in term of health
Ok... this can work. The first idea will need to be well explained. You will need to be clear about how family relates to the retirement plan.
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ReplyDeletemy topic : the young generation of Thai wealthy family will have more opportunity to be successful
First body : they have better education
Second body : they have their own parent as their own example
Third body : they have their family support
You're going to need to explain what you mean by "successful"... how is the young generation going to have more opportunity than ever before?
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ReplyDeleteMy topic is about using sports to deal with social problems.
First body: How sports can deal with drug abuse?
Second body: How sports help to decrease the crime rate?
Third body: How sports mitigate the problem of gender equity?
Ok... this can work. You will need to be clear that it is about PEOPLE who are inspired by sport. Don't lose that focus.
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ReplyDeleteThesis : encouraging GM food can help to propel the economy.
Support1 : GM crops help to increase opportunities of employment.
Support2 : The image of countries will improve by using GM crops.
Support3 : GM crops can increase countries income.
I wonder what you mean in support #2. Many people are actually worried about GM foods, so you will need to be clear about this.
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ReplyDeleteThesis is nuclear power is an advantageous alternative energy.
All of my three bodies will be about the advantages of nuclear energy which are the amount of energy that is provided by nuclear energy, cleanness of nuclear energy and the cost of nuclear energy.
Ok... this looks like it will work. Good.
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ReplyDeleteThesis: space industries should stop their movement to go space because lots of drawbacks are ongoing.
Support 1: Millions of people can not go to space, but only super-rich due to the inequality of life expectancy.
Support 2: planing to space is hazardous because space companies fail again and again.
Support 3: Space tourism accelerates climate change.
This looks good, but idea 1 seems a little confusing. What is the point about life expectancy?
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ReplyDeleteMy thesis is what are the notable dishes in each four regions of Thailand that tourists may have to try it once, and following paragraphs I will separate them into 4 body , food in the Northern, North Eastern, Southern and Central.
This will work. Clear organization.
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ReplyDeleteThesis: sound waves are a factor in plant growth.
1:Information on what a sound wave is and how plants may use it.
2:exploring bad neighbor plants vs good neighbor plants.
3:Information on latest experiments in this are.
Ok... but it is not clear from this how idea 2 relates to the point of sound waves. Clarify this.
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ReplyDeleteMy topic is about discussion on the pros and cons of condom distribution in high school. I will narrow my topic down into 3 body paragraph which included relevant facts on pros and relevant facts on cons and some discussion on researches which going to summarize which one is more general thoughts on other people about the solutions that is it really need to put a condom in school or not.
Ok... this looks good, but my worry is the "discussion" paragraph. Make sure you can keep it under control and not let it get too wide. It should remain relevant with the rest of the essay.
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ReplyDeleteI will explain how Korean wave provokes South Korean economic in three different aspects)
Body1: Travelling (Korean wave brings many foreigns to the country)
Body2: Food (Korean town in overseas)
Body3: The national product (The increase of exportation)
Body 1 and 2 and specific and clear. Body 3 is at risk of being unfocused. Try to be specific again in Body 3 (export of what?... not everything.)
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ReplyDeleteThesis: Specific type of virus can cure and regress cancer
Body1: Information of the virus
Body2: How the experts apply the virus
Body3: Result and further status
This looks like clear and logical organization.
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ReplyDeleteThesis:City people’ health will be took care. Moreover they will feel more comfortable than before. (focus on selling and providing health meal for city people)
Body1: provide and arrange appropriate food table for city people.
(every single male will base on BMI of each costumer)
Body2: More increasing reliability for customers by showing review of other customers who lost weight or get better health because of healthy meal.
Body3: serving convenience for city people
(delivery. order via mobile phone)
Ok... from what I see here, Body 1 is a little confusing and needs clarification. Body 2 and 3 make sense.
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DeleteThesis: There are still a gender inequality in the Thai government.
Body1: women are not promote as quick as men.
Body2: mostly the leader of the government are male.
Body3: women sometimes get lower wages than men
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ReplyDeleteThesis: Lung cancer is not caused from only smoking; it comprises multi factors that also cause cancer.
Body1: Different incidence of lung cancer was found in each continence because of various behaviour.
Body2: Age group of the patient
Body3: The function of genes can eliminate cancer cells in different group of people.
Work to clarify Body 1 (about behaviours... be spcific) and Body 3 (the particular functions in the particular people).
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ReplyDeleteThesis: red bull rise as an action sports leader
Body 1: background on how it started
Body 2: their rise to an action sports leader and their unique marketing strategies
Body 3: why their strategies work for them but not for other business
This should work, but Body 3 is at risk of losing focus when you say "other businesses". Do you mean "other businesses" in the energy drink market? This seems it would be necessary.
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ReplyDeleteThesis statement: These essay will profile the notorious Wichita serial killer who took the police officer twenty years to catch him
Body 1: What is the difference between serial killers/ psychopath / sociopath
Body 2: Why the crimes that BTK consider as Serial killers
Body 3: The possible rational reason why people dare to commit sorrowful crime
Body 1 and Body 2 look excellent. Body 3 at this point looks unclear. You may be trying to define "rational" in the mind of a serial killer, which may not seem "rational" to most people.
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ReplyDeleteMy topic for this essay is about using potato as an alternative energy to help meet rural energy needs. My first body is going to tell the reader about the advantages of using potato as a source of alternative energy. My second body is going to tell about how it works, this part is going to be a little scientific. My last body is to give the example of the place that could be benefit from potato batteries, however, i will choose the place that have abundance of potato and potato is easily grown.
This is ok. You're on your way.
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