So, what happens next?
In this journal, describe some of the supporting paragraph ideas that will follow your Introduction. Make sure that your ideas do not change or forget the point stated in your Thesis Statement. In this journal, you do not need to explain a lot of details, but what are the supporting ideas for your essay.
Remember to include your ID# and Section # in your post. Aj. M
I'll tell you about these dangerous methods of extreme diet. I'll give out example cases. And I'll also tell about the effects of this method.
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5480995 guide ERS section 4
ReplyDeleteFor the next step, I will show the readers how the environmental issues can affect health problems. Firstly, I will show them what are the main issues that affect for Thai people's routine. For example, contaminated water in public, air pollution and traffic jam. Secondly, I will show them the follow problems that will come along with these issues. Lastly, I will show them how to solve these problems.
Ok... work to be as specific as possible. "Problems" and "Solutions" can be boring essays if they're not specific.
DeleteI will give the reasons why supplementary food doesn't really help our body much as everybody thought. Also show the examples that if we have a good lifestyle in eating and exercising, supplementary food won't necessary at all. I will show the bad-effects that happened from any kinds of supplementary food too.
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Ok... work to be as specific as possible. Good outlining will help you here.
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ReplyDelete5480942 Shinaworn Hemwarangkul
ReplyDeleteAs we have known that we have finished our introduction. What comes next is the body. And here is my plan(outline).
I.(1st paragraph)Introduction:Finished and edited
II. Body(divided by 2 benefits and each benefit must have 1-2 paragraphs):(will be completed within a week for each benefit)
A. Mental Health
Cansler, L. (2010). Tai Chi Reduces Depression. Retrieved July 22nd, 2012, From http://www.fyiliving.com/mental-health/depression/tai-chi-reduces-anxiety-and-depression/
1. Relieves stress
2. ???
B. Physical Health
Harvard Medical School. (2009). The Health Benefits of Tai Chi - Harvard Health Publications. Retrieved July 22nd, 2012, From http://www.health.harvard.edu/newsletters/Harvard_Womens_Health_Watch/2009/May/The-health-benefits-of-tai-chi
1. Sleep well
2. Immune to certain diseases
III. Conclusion:(4-5 days before due date)
Ok... we may look at this together before you submit it to see if it is organized. You have a lot of ideas here.
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In this essay I am going to talk about the alcohol addiction and this will include
•How people are getting diseases
•What are the effect of alcohol
•What will this addiction lead to
•Social effect
•Health effects of alcohol
Overall this essay will include about people life who drinking too much and increasing the risk of death
You will need to make some choices here. I think you can cut a couple of ideas there. Try to make your essay as interesting as possible.
DeleteFor example: Don't write about the general effects of alcohol... this is common knowledge. But, the effects of alcohol addiction will be appropriate here.
Ribbon ID 5480880 section7
ReplyDeletei'm writing an essay about benefits of keeping our BMI undercontrol
the supporting ideas on my essay will be
1.self-confidence
2.healthy physical health and mental health
3.health risks
For the body paragraph, the supporting ideas will be:
ReplyDelete• How to eat a healthy diet?
• What amount?
• Ways to fit in exercise.
This sounds far too general... How and What amount? What are the differences here?
DeleteID 5480885 section7
ReplyDeleteTopic:What are the customer’s views about consuming organic vegetables?
Thesis: explain the background, the myths, and the truths about organic foods focusing on vegetables.
Body1: Background = the standards of organic foods
Body2: the belief of the safe food focusing on the issue of pesticides; organic vegetables contain less synthetic residues than non-organic vegetables
Body3: Having more nutrients in organic vegetables; the result is unclear
Body4: environmentally friendly products; Organic vegetable farming techniques can slow the greenhouse-gas emissions and manage the contamination in soil and water.
Conclusion: summary + suggestion +
This is interesting. I'm not sure about Body 4. This may be too much.
DeleteID: 5481063 Section: 7
ReplyDeleteAs my topic is about lung disease cures(Pneumothorax), my body paragraph will be about:
- Early age of this disease treatment method.
- Present day treatment methods such as using chest tube / input syringe / x-ray treatment.
- Advance treatment such as 2 ways of surgery [laparoscopic surgery and regular surgery].
- Aftercare and prevention.
This looks well-organized. It is a good plan... now write! That's the hard part.
DeleteID 5480862 Section7
ReplyDeleteI will write about the benefits of coconut oil.
Body1: Background of coconut oil (what it is)
Body2: How can it helps prevent diseases.
Body3: How can it makes skin smooth
Body4: How can it helps to loose weight
This looks ok. If you think Body 1 is necessary for extra background, that is fine.
DeleteID : 5480898 Section 7
ReplyDeleteFor the next move, I will demonstrate the readers that there are other factors, which lead to be in overweight condition.
Body 1 : Smoking & drinking alcohol
Body 2 : Lack of sleep
Body 3 : Lack of physical activity
ok... "other factors"... other than what?
DeleteId: 5481086 Section 7
ReplyDeleteI'll present many supporting cases that cause the obesity.Also,the disadvantages will be provided.
Body I: Inactivity habits that may cause obesity
Body II: Food Consume, Calories and Overeating problems
Body III: Genetic , Genes transformation, Biological causes
Body IV: Others minor reasons
ID:5480962 Section 7
ReplyDeleteMy topic is about social pressure and media pressure on anorexic girls.
Body 1: pressure from media and the society
Body 2: why it matters to us
Body 3: effect on today's youth
You may split this up: 1) pressure from media 2 pressure from society, etc.
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ReplyDeletefor my essay, it would include
- general introduction of kimchi
- How it's make and why it's good for you
- the exact nutrition that effect possitively
- some supporting cases
Ok... this looks broad, but I'll trust that you know what you're talking about. It may work well.
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ReplyDeleteMy topic is about how the TV addiction relates to obesity. The following paragraphs would be about the terms that make the TV adductors increase their weights.
- TV advertisement with unhealthy food
- Not getting enough sleep causing lack of hormones to break down the fats
- Getting distracted by the TV and consuming too much food than they actually want.
- Not getting enough physical activities
I wonder if "tv advertisement" belongs in this essay. That sounds like another topic.
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ReplyDeleteMy topic is about how the TV addiction relates to obesity. The following paragraphs would be about the terms that make the TV adductors increase their weights.
- TV advertisement with unhealthy food
- Not getting enough sleep causing lack of hormones to break down the fats
- Getting distracted by the TV and consuming too much food than they actually want.
- Not getting enough physical activities
ID: 5480887 section 7
ReplyDeleteAs my topic is how to train like a pro footballer. I will give a little bit of soccer background. And lots of detail of how to train or exercise to be a pro football player
- special exercise programs and why is it important
- special diet for players and the benefits
ID#5480874 Section13
ReplyDeleteMy topic is about the junk food addiction. I will write the supporting ideas about
- people get addicted to junk food due to the conveniences, costs, and lifestyles
- The addiction will be as strong as a drug : the chemical and ingredients in junk food are entering the brain in the same ways as illegal drugs( cocaine and nicotine ), example is shown in the experiment of animals
- growth of the problem in Thailand : shows the statistics compared to the past, life expectancy
I like this. Especially narrowing down to the situation in Thailand. This is an effective plan.
DeleteID:5481096 Section 4
ReplyDeleteMy essay topic is about how cooking destroys vitamins in vegetable. I think I will write three more body paragraphs. The first one is about what are vitamins and how easily they can be destroyed during cooking. The second paragraph is going to be about if it is enough vitamins to consume after cooking, and I will compare the number between amount of vitamin of raw vegetable and cooked. Next is about the way to prevent the destruction of vitamin during cooking, or what should do with vegetable, how to save the vitamins as long as possible. So we can gain maximum amount from consuming vegetable.
Ok... I think you have a clear idea here.
DeleteID: 5481001 Section: 7
ReplyDeleteMy essay is about side effects of using diet pills in women.
Body 1 : general information of diet pills
Body 2 : physical effets
Body 3 : mental effects
Ok.. Body 1 is ok if you think you need more space to explain diet pills. For the next two paragraphs, try to be specific about 1-2 effects. Not more than that.
Delete5480987 Ron Section 7
ReplyDeleteHi Aj Matthew
the topic is "how exercise extend lifespan"
think i would come up with detailed information ranging from basic knowledge to more scientifically sophisticated knowledge. For example, i would additionally give the benefits of exercise or some fact about it. Then after this, i would give some scientific background; how the mechanism in our body stimulated during exercise could benefit our health. And perhaps, i would come up with argument whether trying to achieve long lifespan was good idea or not.
here's my content arrangement
-general knowledge
-more specific information
-exercise directly extend lifespan
-exercise indirectly extend lifespan by preventing disease
-the obstacle of practicing it
thanks for reading
Ok, we have talked about this in class already, and I think you have worked to narrow it, which is a good step here.
DeleteID 5480871 section 7
ReplyDeletemy essay is about the effect of taking whitening drug and disease that will follow after long term use.
#1 body
I will tell about how does trend of fair skin come and also some examples of exaggerated advertising.
#2 body
It's all about the bad side effect from the drug taken by three different ways; ingestion , applacation and injection.
#3 body
The disease that is possibly caused by long term use.
Good clear plan.
DeleteMathas Clements 5480979 section4
ReplyDeleteI'm writing about the obesity of the US , European and Japanese. So my essay will show how these three are different. Therefore, my supporting ideas will be in the form of figures and facts.
I will not get in too deep details yet. (Let see it in the essay. XD)
Yes... let's see. It sounds like a big project. Work to keep it as simple as possible.
DeleteID 5480864 section 13
ReplyDeleteMy topic is about how working overtime affects employees' health and work quality.
- My first body is going to be about how working overtime can result on your physical health condition.
-My second body is about how its affects your mental health condition.
-My last body is about how both physical and mental health conditions affects the work quality. For example, its reduce your ability to work and also make you less focus on work.
This should work well as an outline. It looks like you have developed a clear path.
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