You have created your Introductions. You have introduced the topic, given some examples for the reader, and made the clear thesis statement.... so what happens next?What are the supporting ideas that you will use to write the Body of your essay. Make sure the ideas are relevant and clearly relate to your thesis statement. In this journal blog, please say what your thesis statement is again, and describe some of the ideas you plan to use to support it.
I'm looking forward to reading your work.
Don't forget to include your Section # and ID# in your post. Aj. M
section#11 ID#5580133 My thesis statement is "While more people are infatuated with tattoos due to various reasons, they neglect the drawbacks, especially regarding health problems that might arise from tattoos." My supporting ideas will include how tattoos cause MRI complication. This is a very serious problem that we shouldn't overlook. This is because doctors will have to take quite a while to locate tumors. It is possible that once the tumor is located it might be too late to be cure. Also, i'm going to talk about what cause people with tattoos to be at risk of getting nasty illness such as bloodborne diseases and skin infections.
ReplyDeleteThis will work well... these drawbacks are good because it shows how tattoos can be both the cause of some illnesses but can also prevent cancer detection... well done.
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ReplyDeleteMy thesis statement is "This essay intends to describe the architectural style of the temples in northern Thailand and the cultures it reflect." For the supporting details, I will describe the northern temple architecture and will also explain how it reflects the cultures of people in the north. Each paragraph of the body will be about one style and what aspect of culture it reflects.
Excellent... be very clear about the aspect of the architecture and the aspect of the culture that it links to... I'm looking forward to this one.
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ReplyDeleteThesis statement: "The astonishing design and hi-tech engineering of iPhone hardware is a crucial factor for the overwhelming popularity."
For the first body, I would discuss the iPhone's neatly polished exterior. The materials used in the making of iPhone would be explained. The second body would be about the iPhone's screen. For this body, several sources about screen development and resolution would be given. Last but not least, the third paragraph would be about the engineering of the 8.0 mega pixels camera. These three aspects would answer why iPhone is the leading phone in the market today.
This should work... it might be wise for you to be clear about these there examples of hardware in your Introduction and thesis as well. While the iPhone has so many hardware innovations you could talk about, for the purpose of this essay, you are going to focus on only 3. This is ok... just make it clear. This essay isn't about all of the hardware of the iPhone... it is about 3 in particular.
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ReplyDeleteThesis: The three fundamental aspects in the art of management are leadership, organization and people, and it is with these three components that a business either succeeds or fails.
Leadership: management must have basic fundamental skills in the art of organizing a business. Running a business from a top down requires that managers must have the communication skills to be able to communicate their ideas to lower management and staff.
Organization: the components of an organization must link to each other, one department must always know what another department is doing, and in that operational synergy there will be a good working environment.
People: finally, the most important component in any business is the people that make up the company. From lower management to the worker on the floor, people are a key component. When management can inspire and transfer a vision to the individual worker in a company and the worker becomes part of that vision, all the ingredients for success are in place.
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ReplyDeleteMy thesis statement is that the ancient Egyptians would have never known that the shape of their architecture will wondrously bring about the discovery of the pyramid energy in modern day.
First body : I will explain the readers what is the pyramid energy and how it related to the shape of pyramid.
Second body : It is about the experiment concerning this energy. I mean I will describe how the scientists found this energy.
Last body : I will give an example of the benefits of pyramid energy for human being. The one that I choose is about the ability to heal human from diseases.
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ReplyDeleteMy thesis statement is "Eventhough people underestimate the DJs, The way DJs implement the styles or ideas to produce these type of music is artistic."
Production of beats gradually: When DJ produce music, they way in which they represent music to us is quite entertaining and exciting. They don't exactly just come over to the fun part but they do it gradually. For instance, it will start with a *beep* repetitive for some time, then a *beep* *tap* and so forth
Leveling of pitches: DJ level their pitches between really high and low pitches making the song even more suitable for partying / dancing, a very screechy sound to a low thick pitched one, it is a very complex style as the pitch must be just right
Breaking of music: The sudden break of music is a style which DJ use in cutting the music. It is a gap that creates enthusiasm used by DJ.
In conclusion, Even if DJ use people's music to mix, it still requires alot of skills and experience to do it perfectly and it is also artistic to produce different bass lines and choosing the suitable music to mix.
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ReplyDeleteIn my essay, I will write about the Coke's bottle design.
The topic name might be "The Coke Contoured Design"
Thesis: Background of Coke Contoured, Design of Coke Contoured and
Background of coke contoured, I will write about how's come of this packaging.
Design of coke contour, the explanation of design (describe the design)
marketing of coke contour, according to its unique design, it makes this paragraph be interesting.
I forgot to write the third main idea on thesis part. It is marketing.
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ReplyDeleteThesis: Florence Cathedral, Roman Colosseum and the leaning tower of Pisa, example of most visited place attract numerous travelers by its enchanted design.
First body: talk about the specific style of Florence cathedral, design, number of visitors, and some background information of this place.
Second body: the specific style of Roman Colosseum, design, background info, number of visitors.
Third body, the specific style of the leaning tower of Pisa, number of visitors per year, and also background info.
Conclusion: Overview of the attraction to visitors
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ReplyDeleteThesis: There are several reasons that make the entertainment industry of Korea well-known among young people worldwide, but the most significant factor is marketing such as the presentation of singers, creating the concerts and producing the music.
Then i will describe it in 3 paragraph
first: presentation of singers- unique style (dressing dancing and identity), Important of image and Idol training
Second: creating the concert (social marketing)- social media (youtube), digital distribution and touring
Third: producing the music- hire an international composers and producers, club-friend and the music sounds western (hiphop, rapping)
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ReplyDeleteThesis: Therefore, this essay will present the transitions of R&B music from past until now.
First body I will talk about sound that have changes a lot because more technology, instrument and new way of record: autotune.
Second body: The lyrics, in the past always about love, friendship and experience. Now sexual thing and something that can be sold.
Third body:Fution, new packaging, use media to promote, download though internet. New way of marketing.
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ReplyDeleteMy thesis in final exam is "Are drug really necessary for Hollywood star and artist creativity?" Thus my supporting idea will include three effects of drug in many reasons which lead us know that is it true that drug stimulate creativity or it is just an excuse of artists which lead them addiction.
First body I will talk about LSD-one of narcotic that many popular artist used and give example of artists who anti or did not accept the concept of drug used give creativity.
Second body is about the other side of the story. The begin of widespread drug used in artists. The reason and the consequences after they took drug.
Third body: Despite they know the negative result or effect of drug, why they still use or abuse on drug. This paragraph is about drug for "relaxed".
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ReplyDeleteMy thesis for final essay is A simple and effective packaging design attract consumers attention to chocolate products to increase the sale for businesses.
1 body: The art in the olden time can bring the idea of creating new packaging, for example, Askinosie chocolate.
2 body: Moreover, recycle paper can act as a box for chocolate flowers.
3 body: However, art also can apply in beauty and effective way like Kyobashi chocolate.
4 body: In addition, Chocolate also act as the medicine in the medicine packaging, such as Bloomsberry Medical Chocolate.
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ReplyDeleteThesis: Louis Vuitton is one of the world's most famous brand than enchanted a hi-class clients around the world, not just because of the design and quality, but the marketing as well.
In the first body paragraph, will be about how the design attracts people around the world and give some example of the designers. Second body paragraph, will be about why LV's products are so expensive and the unique of the products. Third body paragraph, will be about the marketing, what are the marketing strategies. Give some example of the brand's presenters
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ReplyDeleteMy thesis statement is Mozart's Classical songs have greater influences on teenagers' mental and emotional health than what people normally think.
Body 1: My supporting details will demonstrate about how does Classical music affect brain's memory and concentration?
Body 2: I will write about the benefits of Classical music to teenagers' body such as the relaxation of muscles and the effect on breathing rate along with the electrical resistance of the skin.
Body 3: Supporting details will involve how does Classical music impact on the mood of the listeners?
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ReplyDeleteThe thesis statement for my essay is "It's definitely worthy to invest in Apple Company, it's an innovative company with good market share of its product, and it has good financial health.
B1. Apple's stock has grow rapidly.
B2. Apple Company has good financial health.
B3. Apple Company does not stop, it 's an innovative company.
B4. The market share for the Apple products are good.
Conclusion. using prediction by talking about the new product's market share and the stock's expection.
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ReplyDeleteThesis statement: The advertisements make the alcohol brands better known, increasing the sales and have make some people addicted to drinking.
I will talk about the effects from advertisement on alcohol business and the consumer.
Body 1 - making the alcohol brands better known
Body 2 - increasing the sales
Body 3 - people addict to drinking
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ReplyDeleteMy thesis state is that "Thai people still use those songs and music in many events very carefully with the correct meaning for the traditional one and liberal meaning for the less serious."
B1: In the important events, the musician gather up and play "Pleang Nha-Pat".
B2: "Pleang Hoam Roang" is the songs that play in general and does not have the strictly meaning.
B3: Unlike the first two, "Pleang Diew" are being played to show the skill of the musicians.
B4: "Pleang Kred" has the meaning according to its lyrics, which determine the suitability in that event.
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ReplyDeleteMy thesis statement is "Porcelain is important for Chinese people"
Firstly, it is one of main product that china export (trade).
Secondly, it is very useful for household (dolls, fake teeth, cups, dishes, baskets)
finally, it can propagate Chinese lifestyle.
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ReplyDeleteMy thesis is the advantage of listening to classical music include medical care and treatment.
Body1: classical music helps to boost emotion
Body2: it can develop the intelligence
Body3: help for illnesses
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ReplyDeleteMy thesis statement is "Boutique hotels are different in three main ways which are small and quiet, providing personal services (including facilities) and comforts, and their staffs or employees are friendlier and take more care.
First body : If the hotels are small and quiet, people are allowed to be private and it definitely will not be dirty.
Second Body : More services and facilities can lead costumers to be comfortable such as relaxing, and impressing.
Final body : Their staffs are really benevolent. They can help and support people all the times, so it can be related to one lovely big family.
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ReplyDeleteMy thesis statement is Graffiti;is it art or barbarism?
supporting details:
B1: explanation of how graffiti affect the local communities including all negative things.
B2: advantage of beautiful graffiti in communities.
B3: Graffiti can also be a crime.
B4: In other place, graffiti can develop to be legal.
This blog is now closed. Thank you for your participation. Aj. M
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